Yeah. I heavily botched the build and delivery of this novel.
In my original design plan and outline, the plan was for the fight with Granny to essentially be the midway of the book… and there was a reason I kept from having a Cecelia chapter until now. You’ll see it next chapter.
This. This was a huge mistake. I had gotten accustomed to how I did the Blue Steel books, which was heavy mission, light interaction, and it threw off my mental calculations for how arcs and chapters were going to look in my other books.
This book is now over 60,000 words long and… yeah… I fucked it up. The fight with Granny and its aftermath should have been the *end* of the book, not it’s mid-point twist/upswing like I had originally envisioned.
I made the jump to dismount, and I can’t stick it. Stopping now would be akin to trying to turn around and climb back on the mean while in mid air.
So this book will be ending soon (still got another Cecelia chapter up in a couple hours, and a Greenwitch chapter which should end this novel, for all intents.)
In the edit works to make this a proper complete novel at some point in the future, I must do the following:
At least 10 or so Cecelia chapters (adding roughly 25,000 words to this book). Greatly expanding the “grow and develop” portions of the story, instead of skipping as much of the summer as I did. Some intermittent “fluff” chapters, mainly from Cecelia’s PoV. I’m hoping for at least one geek chapter, where she meeds Domenic’s friends.
One of these chapters will be the three of them building their little underground base- a Cecelia chapter, no doubt. Creative noncombat powers use… so few supers novels ever bother doing that (except maybe a “sports” chapter, which is the same thing).
Another will be a Cecelia-Seraph chapter. She accidentally promised him a date, remember? More lighthearted and fun chapter than my normal fare, at that.
Introduce a few more characters and gang factions into the story- these will be in heavier play in the sequel to this book. The original plan was to save them for after the Granny Greenwitch fight and aftermath… when Cecelia chapters were going to become a thing… but the more I look at it, the more I realize the tone and structure of that is going to be so different as to be valid as a new book.
Perhaps even change the encounter between the trio and Adam some… okay, a lot, probably… most likely by having them clash earlier on in the story to build that up a bit (and thus spread the two Adam chapters out with quite a bit more story).
All these are things I could have done to make this story better, yet didn’t in the interest of pursuing a specific payoff which didn’t work out. All these are things I need to fix. I had a plan, I took a risk, and it failed. That is what happens, sometimes… and, not gonna lie, it’s a bitter pill to swallow.
Perhaps that’s why Hollywood is so afraid to do anything original- it sucks when you fuck it up. That, and the money..
So. Here’s what’s happening, and while it may cost me readers, it has to happen.
I will finish this book’s last few chapters in order to close this novel. At which point, I forgo my usual week vacation and sit down to republish this entire novel.
I will do what I usually do when creating new novels, and fold all these chapters into their book section, where I will publish a disclaimer explaining it is the defunct version. Then I’ll start working on the “revised version” of Threefold. Every day, I’ll edit and refit at least one chapter, in addition to the usual goal of publishing three chapters a week (most of them Cecelia chapters) and thus build the novel’s ~70k long story up to ~100k, and make it a full novel, with proper development, buildup and payoff rather than… rather than what we have here…
Because I firmly believe this novel can be salvaged. It’s not even bad, it’s just not good enough for my standards.
Then, when I have the revised version up and running, I’ll leave both of them published on site (with this post sitting at the top of it) so new readers and old alike can compare them. Maybe, if I get famous someday, I can use it as an object lesson that everyone fucks it up once in a while.
Thank you for reading, and sorry for wasting your time by fucking up the whole novel.